Braina Veliz
Per 4
AP English
Question 1
Green living is a great way promoting
conservation and a wise use of natural resources. Going green is a utopian
ideal to which we must aspire if we want life to continue on this planet. It is
important for our society and government to train itself to use natural
resources being provided to us than to pollute our planet even more with huge
factories and companies producing smog and chemicals and releasing it into the
air in which we breathe. Diseases such as cancer and birth deformities are on
the increase and have been attributed to pollutant exposures. Pollution
requires more effort by governments, the international community and
independent bodies involved in fighting it. It is not enough to have these
rules but their enforcement is equally important.
Not only will learning to use our natural
resources with respect to how finite they will serve future generations but
will help prolong the amount of time that the earth will continue to sustain
life. it will also open up new jobs in technology where sectors have
traditionally been high paying and therefore is good for our economy. Also
people have not noticed Americas problem of bad habits and how it has build up
in the last three decades.” Our planet is getting hot, flat, and crowded which
is an issue on the fact that it is tightening energy supplies and extinction of
planets and animals, deepening energy, poverty, and accelerating climate change
(source C)”. in order for America to
take lead in solving he worlds big problem to create new tools, energy sources
and ethics which will help our planet to grow in a cleaner, more sustainable
way.
To live a green life will also be
accommodating to those stressing over the high utility bill. “Electricity
generated by fossil fuels for a single home puts more carbon dioxide into the
air than two average cars.-(source F)”. Although this is true there is a lot of
ways you can do to save energy and money at
home and in transportations vehicles. One being to conserve water and
electricity in your home and driving sensibly without wasting as much gasoline
the government should foster green practices to give people an extent to how
much electricity and water should be used at home this will help our planet in
a great way and also with droughts and other natural disasters.
Many say that going green will cause an
avalanche of job loss, financial hardship and in some cases catastrophic
poverty. And also going green eats of productivity accepting the gross national
product.” While its arguably good for the environment the fact that 3 minutes
per week over 300 million citizens take up 7,800,000,000 man hours of time per
year (source A)”. even if this is true our government should not be focused on
man hours being lost but in the need for change in our environment and society
which will be beneficial in our planets future.
The introductory paragraph in the essay provides the thesis statement and a brief background of the topic, green living, that states what to expect when continuing to read. In the three paragraphs that follow, a specific point on the benefits and possible negative aspects that go along with going green. In each of these paragraphs, a source is cited, and then related to what is being discussed in the paragraph. All in all, the essay correctly addresses the prompt and provides sufficient evidence for their opinion.
ReplyDeleteTh introduction provides a well developed theme but grammatical sophistication can be elaborated. Quotes are well analyzed and a good use of citations are given. such as, ” While its arguably good for the environment the fact that 3 minutes per week over 300 million citizens take up 7,800,000,000 man hours of time per year (source A)”.
ReplyDeleteThe writers intro provides a strong thesis statement towards green living and it being a necessity in society. It is supported with good citations from sources and provides elaborate analysis for each that enables the essay's flow.
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